Adam,
Thank you for working on your essay. Please address the comments I have left so far. Also, please make sure your final draft has plenty of details. This is a very "bare bones" essay, and I know you can writer with much more pizazz!! : )
Mrs. Smedsrud
RYAN MONAHAN
Meet Ryan Monahan. He was born on June 17, 2000. In Sioux Falls, SD. He has a mom and a dad. He has no brothers, but two sisters. He also has three faithful dogs.
Ryan Likes many ports. Some examples are basketball, Football, and biking. He spends a lot of money. A few of his favorite foods are at Boscos and Wendy's. And you could find most of his favorite music at 103.7.
One of his best character traits is his ability to be a good friend. Another is his sportiness. His role model is his Dad Because he's his dad , and he's there for him, plus he has lots of trucks.
Ryan doesn't Have a good memory of sixth Grade.His advice for next years sixth graders is "get your homework done." His only excitement about next year is that he'll be one year closer to Freedom.
Some of his wishes for the future is to have no wife. He wants to have three plane hangars for his cars.And his own restoration shop. Pretty cool, huh.
Well thats about it. But remember this. Ryan is an awesome friend. And if you know him, he'll usually be their for you.
Thank you for working on your essay. Please address the comments I have left so far. Also, please make sure your final draft has plenty of details. This is a very "bare bones" essay, and I know you can writer with much more pizazz!! : )
Mrs. Smedsrud
RYAN MONAHAN
Meet Ryan Monahan. He was born on June 17, 2000. In Sioux Falls, SD. He has a mom and a dad. He has no brothers, but two sisters. He also has three faithful dogs.
Ryan Likes many ports. Some examples are basketball, Football, and biking. He spends a lot of money. A few of his favorite foods are at Boscos and Wendy's. And you could find most of his favorite music at 103.7.
One of his best character traits is his ability to be a good friend. Another is his sportiness. His role model is his Dad Because he's his dad , and he's there for him, plus he has lots of trucks.
Ryan doesn't Have a good memory of sixth Grade.His advice for next years sixth graders is "get your homework done." His only excitement about next year is that he'll be one year closer to Freedom.
Some of his wishes for the future is to have no wife. He wants to have three plane hangars for his cars.And his own restoration shop. Pretty cool, huh.
Well thats about it. But remember this. Ryan is an awesome friend. And if you know him, he'll usually be their for you.